wha- oh… my… beautifully told. creepy and alluring. sequel please?

This story is actually based on a news story I watched a few years back. Kid killed his father because “Jesus” told him to. Scary.

I’m depressed now.

Oh wow…
Very well-written, and I always love a good schizophrenic.

It would read better if you put the internal dialog in italics. This lets the reader know that the main character is thinking. I’m pretty sure both “the bumper sticker is awesome,” and “my father?” are both pieces of internal dialog. It would be more clear if they were italicized.

Overall, this is a well told story of a very disturbed young man. Believing in Jesus. Craziness. =P

Thanks, all, for the comments. Mr. Perkins, I took your advice, and now it does read much more clearly. Thanks again!