I loved this line:

The weight of her mother’s pearls around her neck reminded her of the strength she had given her, and kept her from turning back.

Beautifully written. One minor correction: it should read “altar” in your third to last sentence.

thanks I’ll fix that

Tear Spectacular

Wow. That was really kinda raw emotion, unadulterated. Your words fit it perfectly! The descriptions you had were almost kinda metaphorical…

oo so hard not to say white on this one! I totally feel her nerves! also, i second Ana about the sentence.

Beautiful.

fantastic i really feel her nerves through her text and yet there text shows the hope as well, i loved it,

4got pencils lol

very, beautifully written. nice gjob =)

beautiful descriptions, beautifully written.

The structure and diction are just perfect to convey her nerves, tension and anxiety. Brilliantly crafted!