wow, very sad. I especially felt the pain in the way you described the hollow convulsing of crying beyond tears— and how the cold drizzle brings on the dreariness. Good last line too.

This is a nice piece, I am glad that you invited me to come and take a look, especially because it hits close to home. I was just having a conversation tonight regarding the broken-ness in other people and the broken-ness in ourselves. There is a lot of poetry here that makes the story shine. Excellent entry!

Gorgeously written. Nice job setting the tone and creating the scene with a nice gradual resolve. I guess by about half way through, but I wasn’t sure.

An apt description of depression and despair, whatever the cause.

excellent as usual, MH. :) At first I wondered if Tom had hurt her physically, and was glad he was gone, then I realized she was only hurt by him emotionally, by his passing. I was confused by the placement of ‘like Tom’, but I got it all straightened out. :) The story then blossomed into a piece about pure loss.

It always rains when I visit the cemetaries. To hide your tears. The burden of loss was very well described m.h. well captured.

this just screams truth and emotion. it seriously took my breath away. I love it. Great work.

You never disapoint :)

Ed this is the most beautiful comeback ever. I am almost lost for words. The description… the situation… the beautiful, beautiful imagery and the way it reverberates with me so fully,… it’s all just so stunning. You need to keep writing this time.

This is truly beautiful. The imagery is amazing and the story is well told. I love this piece.

Touched my heart, keep up the lovely work!

This is something I can identify with, I feel like that girl a lot.