“Cracked a melody with his knuckles.” What a line. I can see the smoke, from his cigarette, drooling down his dark suit,hat at a suitable angle as he draws his .38, casual like even to the point of blowing the smoke away from the tip of the gun. My feet are up and I want the sequel.
I have to disagree with PPP about changing “That all, you dog?” In my mind, if you drop the ‘you’ it reads more like “Wassup, dawg?” I feel that your version conveys more contempt and gets across the point that this dog is in fact, a dog.
Trann
Ridcully Calvert
Krulltar
Marli
stargazer1960
transit
Abstract
Mostly Harmless
Abby (LoA)
Breakfast At Jamie's
Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)
Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)
LaraLustre
DoItForScience
DoItForScience
Aurelia