Danged hard challenge, but it gave me a chance to use a theme I’d been mulling over, based on a legend among tribes of Papua New Guinea, an intertribal contention about whose sun deity was the real deity and whose was rotting away in a valley somewhere.
Wow, given the challenge this is absolutely phenomenal. Well done, indeed.
You might want to substitute “area” for “place,” since that is a five letter word. Also, you have some repeated phrasing in your last sentence that needs to be edited out. I still give this a five, though.
a worthy oponent. Well done…fits well. I love how you still got some uncommon words in there. Still some posh language even in just 4 letters! Nicely done!
I must admit, on my first read-through I was mostly thinking “what the hell?” and hearing Uriah Heep in my head. After reading the challenge, I now say well done as usual, old boy.
I am trying to open a book with glue between the pages. The words are orated sublimely and the feel is as if the whole theme is compacted. Ominous THX.
Even without knowing the challenge, I thought this piece was a tad excellent :P It was definitely old-world sounding, but just enough that the meaning was still clear while conveying some culture and mystery.
The very least line was confusing to read though, and I’m wondering if it’s not supposed to be “Pray, oh man, that you not be of that ilk.” Very well-written though. Nice job :)
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