Hahaha! Congrats on being featured. I, for one, am feeling really slow-witted because I didn’t see that twist coming, but now I realize you built up to it real nicely!
I think it sucks. It’s not creative, and not original. Maybe it would stand out among a sea of sleep-deprived, angst-ridden, depressed, over-taxed, apathetic, unsure college freshman who aren’t even trying, but it doesn’t deserve praise on a site where people come of their on volition solely to write short stories.
That opening, the way you captured the guy’s drunkenness, is honestly inspired, and a little story opener I wouldn’t be surprised if I found myself subconsciously stealing in the future…!
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